Know Nothing Snowball / Will Dockery

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Will Dockery

2010-07-26 20:46:19 UTC

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Know Nothing Snowball

I walk into Dunk And Dine
to have breakfast
and usher in the dawn.
In the back booth with a cigarette
I think of you
and know there's something going on.
You left me on the sidewalk
looking up
hearing laughter on the second floor.
People say I'm stone crazy
to be in love with you
and get nothing more.
See no evil,
Speak no evil,
Smell no evil,
you're a Know Nothing Snowball.

I remember last year in the hallway
of the Courtyard Marriott.
I was standing on the balconly
as you rode by in your chariot.
Staring in the mirror
I know sometimes I look quite ancient.
But I cover up line or two
and with some alchemy
make it transcendant.
Speak no evil,
Stand for evil,
See no evil,
you're a Know Nothing Snowball.

She blew him a kiss goodbye
on a transatlantic video conference.
As she smiled across several time zones
His heart broke worldwide
straight through the circumference.

Lost in the Piggly Wiggly
looking for a bag of cheese.
Roger Whittaker crooning about the last farewell
nostalgia nearly brings me
to my knees.
I think of you as a little girl here
summer mudpies still smouldering
Tarzan and the Green Berets
John Brown in his grave moldering.
Speak no evil,
Stand for evil,
See no evil,
you're a Know Nothing Snowball.

I'm back at the Dunk And Dine
to have breakfast
and usher in the dawn.
In the back booth with a cigarette
I think of you
and know there's something going on.
You left me on the sidewalk
looking up
hearing laughter on the second floor.
People say I'm out of my mind
to be in love with you
and get nothing more.
See no evil,
Speak no evil,
Smell no evil,
you're a Know Nothing Snowball.

-Will Dockery

©2010 / May 16th 2010

mat1t3

2010-07-26 22:02:25 UTC

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Post by Will Dockery
http://www.facebook.com/#!/note.php?note_id=396349394801
Know Nothing Snowball
I walk into Dunk And Dine
to have breakfast
and usher in the dawn.
In the back booth with a cigarette
I think of you
and know there's something going on.
You left me on the sidewalk
looking up
hearing laughter on the second floor.
People say I'm stone crazy
to be in love with you
and get nothing more.
See no evil,
Speak no evil,
Smell no evil,
you're a Know Nothing Snowball.
I remember last year in the hallway
of the Courtyard Marriott.
I was standing on the balconly
as you rode by in your chariot.
Staring in the mirror
I know sometimes I look quite ancient.
But I cover up line or two
and with some alchemy
make it transcendant.
Speak no evil,
Stand for evil,
See no evil,
you're a Know Nothing Snowball.
She blew him a kiss goodbye
on a transatlantic video conference.
As she smiled across several time zones
His heart broke worldwide
straight through the circumference.
Lost in the Piggly Wiggly
looking for a bag of cheese.
Roger Whittaker crooning about the last farewell
nostalgia nearly brings me
to my knees.
I think of you as a little girl here
summer mudpies still smouldering
Tarzan and the Green Berets
John Brown in his grave moldering.
Speak no evil,
Stand for evil,
See no evil,
you're a Know Nothing Snowball.
I'm back at the Dunk And Dine
to have breakfast
and usher in the dawn.
In the back booth with a cigarette
I think of you
and know there's something going on.
You left me on the sidewalk
looking up
hearing laughter on the second floor.
People say I'm out of my mind
to be in love with you
and get nothing more.
See no evil,
Speak no evil,
Smell no evil,
you're a Know Nothing Snowball.
-Will Dockery
©2010 / May 16th 2010

1. too bad the faceliftbook link
requires me to be logged in
because, i have no account
nor do i want one.

2. as much as i'm sure you'd like
this to be a group about lyrics,
it's not...it's a poetry gathering.
therefore, don't be surprised if
some folks don't buy your cheap
cocktails at the duck&dine.

3. what in the hell is a "know nothing snowball"??
the title reeks of a cliche avalanche about ready
to roar down the cliff of poetry mountain.
i understand these are lyrics. therefore,
i also understand the importance of hearing
the accompanying music. however, when
are you ever going to learn that spacefacebook
requires people to be members in order
to enjoy the scenic beauty of its natural cyber
wonders up to and including your precious
video?

4. if we were to approach this as a poem, then
there are some pros and cons.
cons:
a:
"stand for evil" in the second and fourth
stanzas stands out like a sour thumb.
it's the only hint that "snowball" refers to
snowball as in avalanche as in avalanche
of loves blind ambition. consequently, the
return to "see no evil" in the dismount
begs the reader to wonder if the narrator
received a blow by a blunt object to the side of the
head before writing this drivel.

b. "marriot" vs. "chariot" just ain't gonna work.
"marriot" is pronounced mary ought while
"chariot" is pronounced cherry ut as in foot
not chariot as in "not." you could possibly
argue the tomato vs. toma(u)to thing, but it's left
to too much conjecture for a serious poem
with a big ol' copyright "c" down at the bottom.

c. the last stanza:
the narrator is back at the old haunt to
usher in a "new" dawn, or is it like a broken record
where he is simply back at the same day starting
over again like "groundhog day?" again, was
the narrator hit over the head with a two by four
before he wrote this? that's a legitimate question.
IOW, instead of "there's SOMETHING going
on," it should probably read "there's NOTHING
going on" because this appears to be recycled
cliche riddled garbage copied directly from the
first stanza. mind you, these are lyrics to
a song and sometimes that makes a difference
upon hearing said song. however, we're
approaching this as a poem since not everyone
has a spaceface account to view the accompanying
"music." and, as indicated above, very little
adds to the effect of a snowball in any part
of this poem: neither growing nor melting.

pros:
it's one of your shorter pieces.

: )

Will Dockery

2010-07-26 22:29:12 UTC

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1. too bad the faceliftbook link
requires me to be logged in
because, i have no account
nor do i want one.

I need to remember that, I'm growing quite unhappy with the
"exclusive" nature of Facebook.

2. as much as i'm sure you'd like
this to be a group about lyrics,
it's not...it's a poetry gathering.
therefore, don't be surprised if
some folks don't buy your cheap
cocktails at the duck&dine.
3. what in the hell is a "know nothing snowball"??
the title reeks of a cliche avalanche about ready
to roar down the cliff of poetry mountain.
i understand these are lyrics. therefore,
i also understand the importance of hearing
the accompanying music. however, when
are you ever going to learn that spacefacebook
requires people to be members in order
to enjoy the scenic beauty of its natural cyber
wonders up to and including your precious
video?
4. if we were to approach this as a poem, then
there are some pros and cons.
"stand for evil" in the second and fourth
stanzas stands out like a sour thumb.
it's the only hint that "snowball" refers to
snowball as in avalanche as in avalanche
of loves blind ambition. consequently, the
return to "see no evil" in the dismount
begs the reader to wonder if the narrator
received a blow by a blunt object to the side of the
head

I did get a pretty heavy blow a couple of weeks ago when the (broken)
trunk lid of the car slammed the back of my head. Starry-starry
night.

b. "marriot" vs. "chariot" just ain't gonna work.
"marriot" is pronounced mary ought while

Maybe a "Southern Thing" but we rhyme them down here.

"chariot" is pronounced cherry ut as in foot
not chariot as in "not." you could possibly
argue the tomato vs. toma(u)to thing, but it's left
to too much conjecture for a serious poem
with a big ol' copyright "c" down at the bottom.
the narrator is back at the old haunt to
usher in a "new" dawn, or is it like a broken record
where he is simply back at the same day starting
over again like "groundhog day?" again, was
the narrator hit over the head with a two by four
before he wrote this? that's a legitimate question.
IOW, instead of "there's SOMETHING going
on," it should probably read "there's NOTHING
going on" because this appears to be recycled
cliche riddled garbage copied directly from the
first stanza. mind you, these are lyrics to
a song and sometimes that makes a difference
upon hearing said song. however, we're
approaching this as a poem since not everyone
has a spaceface account to view the accompanying
"music." and, as indicated above, very little
adds to the effect of a snowball in any part
of this poem: neither growing nor melting.
it's one of your shorter pieces.
: )

Thanks for reading & commenting. (tm)

--
Will Dockery and the Shadowville Allstars at Hogbottom V in 2010.